light
The prompt this week at Read Write Poem was to write about light. I’ll be tweaking this some more to get it exactly how I want it, but I’m pretty happy with it so far.
Naked but Not
Scales of darkness fall
from brown irises black
pupils long dilated contract
stark honest brilliance illumines
flaccid flesh now stretched
taut over skeleton sinews
toiling muscles convulse tearing
tight tissue raw beneath
dead layers sloughed aside
till naked but not
skin flaunting bones I
see myself revealed whole
less and more.
July 7, 2008 at 3:00 pm
wow.. a dark beauty…
July 7, 2008 at 11:09 pm
“Toiling muscles convulse tearing/tight tissue” — great music here and there’s a sense captured throughout of this physicality, a striving.
July 8, 2008 at 2:48 am
Macabre, but somehow beautiful.
July 8, 2008 at 6:42 am
Dark, yet beautiful….
piece of charcoal split into splinters
July 10, 2008 at 11:56 pm
I liked reading this and it sounds good too – the most powerful line for me was ’till naked but not’ – hence the title, I guess.