fun in the sun
That’s this week’s Read Write Poem prompt. And it immediately made me think of Friday, when my son and I spent the afternoon picking raspberries in the Yakima River Canyon. You can read more about our excursion (plus links to a fabulous pie recipe) on my other blog. Be warned, though: I posted a photo of my pie, and it’s making me hungry right now just looking at it (which is not good, because the pie is long gone).
Raspberry Pie
Lips tongue hands gangly legs
stained with crimson
one two five at a time
into his mouth
expertly sucks juice
from each finger
eager searching
slim vines heavy laden
lifting leaves aside
reaching around thorns
just watching him
I taste them too but
remind myself
fill my bucket
wait to savor
until I’m home
elbow deep in flour
butter cut in roll out
fragrant fragile dough
till parchment thin
gently fold in half
quarters then unfold
ease into earthen ware
blue glazed pie plate
work fast mold pinch
cut vents for juice
bubbling through
same juice
he licks from thumbs
streaks across cheeks
already freckled flushed
kissed by July’s ardent rays
on this most perfect of days.
July 14, 2008 at 7:30 am
I’m sixty-five and I still remember mom and I picking not raspberries but wild black berries. In the South you have to watch out for the snakes and then scratch the chiggers. However, the pie she presented us with a scoop of ice cream was a high light of summer. Thanks for the memory and a fine piece of work (the pie and the poem). DCH
July 14, 2008 at 8:05 am
So wonderful that we can hear it read!
I love how you illustrate as childen, we are eager for the taste immediately, but as adults, we wait for that perfect moment when all the work and ingredients come together for the real prize!
The rhyme is a perfect ending.
July 14, 2008 at 8:42 am
Sounds great… there’s something special about picking fruit in the hot sun! Brings back many memories of going strawberry-picking. I love the way you describe the making of the pie… made me hungry!
July 14, 2008 at 9:45 am
this took me back to time spent with my grandmother and her promising to make me my favorite raspberry pie if i only stopped eating and left her enough for the pie.
the way this poem appears on the “page” (screen) it looks like a thorny branch (branch isn’t the right word) of a raspberry bush. if it’s intentional, bravo! if it’s not, claim it! own it! it works!
July 14, 2008 at 4:12 pm
I love your description of making the crust — an art in itself. This poem really engages the senses — lovely.
July 15, 2008 at 8:43 am
I love the way this looks, I love the way this feels, I love the way this sounds. To me it looks like you’ve taken a couple of bites out of the right-hand edge of the text. Bet it tastes good too!
July 16, 2008 at 4:37 pm
really a beautiful pie berry poem…. i love making pie pastry… and you have described it just so… down to the butter!!!…. gonna hafta go and make a pie now… maybe apple… your format complements yr poem and the last few lines are delicious… most perfect of days… sorta reminds me of huckleberry pickin..